Monday, July 18, 2005

A variant on Ernesto Priego’s Hubiera

If
yesterday the
rain, even if

falling
ever so
lightly, & we

had
gone out
in it, bare-

foot
& naked,
& just in

case
it never
stopped raining we

running
so the
ice spilled from

the
glasses we
carried & melted

making
the run
a little lighter,

making
the rain
a little harder.

3 comments:

Ernesto said...

Maaan! As if your poetic superiority had to be proved yet again... It's awesome. Thank you, I am honored :)

mark young said...

This is not a pissing contest. I loved the cadences of your original poem & it sounded wonderful even though I didn't understand it. Then when I read the translation by your friend S. from Warwick, I just had to bend my knee in homage.

Ernesto said...

I know, I know. I can't get over it. You really picked up what I wanted to express.

I really appreciate it.